https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G0O7v-9c5QA&feature=youtu.be
2) I think leaving out the "imagine this" approach is something that I will leave out just like last time because it just sounds very scripted, and I don't want to follow a template of speaking. I like the feedback of cutting out the filler words because I often catch myself doing that when I speak.
3) I think the biggest change on this pitch is my confidence when giving the pitch. I know that I have gotten better on each attempt, and I want to maintain that improvement.
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Duc,
ReplyDeleteI agree with what you said about the imagine this part. Saying that sounds very scripted and is almost cliché of when you are telling a story or a pitch. I also agree with your confidence boost that you have on this third pitch. I also had this confidence that now that it was the third time I feel like I have done it enough times where I could do it well and anytime a person told me to. Great job
Duc,
ReplyDeleteAgain I agree with leaving out the imagine this introduction. For a situation like this that many people may not really be able to imagine, it is more beneficial. I also agree with you that it can sometimes sound scripted, and if there is a different hook that will still get the audience to put themselves in the shoes of the prospective customer, that is much better. Your confidence seems to be getting better and better! Good job.
Hi Duc,
ReplyDeleteI agree that leaving out the imagine this approach is a good decision. I think this allows your pitch to feel more natural and overall improves it. I also think it is good to leave out the filler words in your pitch because filler words just waste some of your valuable time and can sound unprofessional if used too much. It is also good that you are sounding more confident in your pitch because if you don’t sound confident pitching the idea who is going to buy into it.
This is a good pitch. I like the fact that you made an effort to explain your service more and why people would want to use it. I think that you should include some kind of imagine this line to bring interest into your pitch. I also think that with a little rehearsal, it could look really polished and refined and would be an excellent pitch. Great job.
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ReplyDeleteI think you did a much better job in this elevator pitch by having more confidence, and I think that you did a much better overall. my problem with these types of situations is that i get nervous or to think of what comes next, and it’s good to learn not to say it because it makes you look more professional.
Excellent work Duc,
ReplyDeleteYou're progressing very well with your pitches. You use great communication by having slight hand gestures and speaking confidently and clearly. I love how you went in more depth over your service this time and think anyone who heard this pitch will know exactly what you're doing and why.