2) I really enjoyed reading my feedback on my first elevator pitch. There was a feedback where using the "imagine this" approach wasn't a very good idea. It stated that I should have just gave the background of music festivals and the illicit drug use in the culture, and I believe that it is a good starting point of my elevator pitch. I think the most silly feedback was my camera control in the presentation, because I do not think that I have any control over it.
3) I changed to use less of the "imagine this" this approach and described more of the music festival scene.
I think this is a good elevator pitch. I think that your use of your hands to convey your message was very good. I would say don't completely leave out your "imagine this" scenario because it makes the audience think about your service as if they were going to use it; it makes it relatable. It is also good that you talked about the way it would work and how you could draw in customers. Great job!
ReplyDeleteDuc, I think in terms of making the audience understand the benefits and necessity of your product, you did much better in this pitch than the previous one. I had previously told you to reconsider the "imagine this" approach, and I think that by removing that, your pitch is better because many people who would invest in this idea would probably not be hooked by imagining they are using illicit drugs. Good job!
ReplyDeleteHi Duc,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a better job on this assignment. I agree that starting off your pitch with imagine this isn’t a good idea as it doesn’t grab the listeners attention and it uses some of the valuable time that you have during an elevator pitch. I also have had problems deciding how to start my elevator pitch, so I know it isn’t easy. Good job improving on this assignment.
Hi Duc,
ReplyDeleteyou did much better in regards to not saying "imagine this" this elevator pitch. also, I can say that you did better on communicating your idea overall. I also used to have that problem regarding saying words that dont sound profesional during my presentations but it is always better not to say them specially during presentations now as it will help you look more professional.
Great work Duc,
ReplyDeleteYou seemed much more calm this time around with your Elevator Pitch. It's very easy to get caught up on one catch phrase or a filler word. Something to transition us into a new argument or introduce a new idea but often what we end up doing is over using it. So excellent work being able to cut down on that.